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[A Fable II Experience 2]

Drags a bit too often

I enjoyed the video for the most part, but I felt like the conversations dragged on a bit too often. In particular, jokes like "I feel like I want to... kick a chicken!" are "random" but really kill the pacing. I'm sure it's funny to you to be able to pop a silly joke like that in there, but moments like the conversation with the guards are so funny that it makes me wish the whole thing was more concise and witty. Random humor gets old very fast unless there's a lot of action going on.

WhiteLightning responds:

Hmm, well, that's actually nice to know you liked the guard part best, because I thought THAT was the kind of part that dragged a little :) Guess it depends on the person. Glad you enjoyed the video, thanks for the review.

[Avada Kedavra]

Easy watching but not funny to outsiders

It's very well done and put together, but as somebody who doesn't follow Harry Potter or know the relationship between characters I can't enjoy it as much as I would if you took a few seconds to introduce things. You can guess at a lot of it, but almost all of the "jokes" are insider. Like, I don't know what Avada Kedavra is referring to even.

You can easily say it's my fault for not knowing, but introductions and establishing the plot is always a good idea.

TmsT responds:

Voldy: "Avada Kedavra", what a wonderful curse.
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Draco: Avada Kedavra?
Wormtail: Yeah, it's our favourite hex.
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Writing in book: "Avada Kedavra / The Killing Curse"
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I could go on, but I would be basically describing the entire movie. Just wondering - did you watch it with sound on and the monitor plugged in?

["EXTINCT"]

High quality, but lacks direction

This is very impressive work on a technical level, and even the style is enjoyable but I'm afraid you need to put yourself in the "Director" chair and think purely in terms of the pacing that the viewer will want to see. All that great work is wasted if the pacing is wrong. Also, I'm sure English isn't your first language but please fix the grammar before you publish something like this -- it causes the whole project to feel less professional.

I say you could make it a lot faster, so that events are somewhat surprising. Even though you want people to enjoy all the hard work you did, people will watch it multiple times in order to see what you did.

I hope this helps you, because your technical skill really does not need any improvement to be able to make amazing work.

manuelberja responds:

thanks!
i'll study english from now on.
:)

[Don't Sleep, Robby!]

Well done but not enjoyable

The characters (most likely inspired by real people) are not actually funny, cool, interesting or deep enough to hold interest.

Bobert-Rob responds:

For you. :p

[Male Comfort]

Punchline needs punch

It's a pretty good joke that the guy only wants to eat, but it's off-center and so small that I almost didn't notice what was happening. Also, it could afford to have a faster pace altogether, so that people don't lose interest.

Having the annoying U2 song play all the way through is also not good.

Finally, why was this said to be 17+? Just because the guy is in his underwear?

Vitty responds:

Yer... i guess so anyway...